Photography with Poetry- something out of the ordinary-
woman by the gold
gypsy inside the sepia
pray that I might be
crackles of wet grass and dew
black lace without a truth
Charlotte, I'm still troubled by the so processed image and the poem that follows. I'd value you to visit that again if you might to consider if all the diversion from reality was needed. For now, however, let's put aside that; we can just think about the poem.
Since this is a photography forum, the poetry must be looked at from the point of view of the picture that precedes it, (unless the picture is done to
illustrate the poem, but that must be disclosed so we are orientated as to purpose).
Why wouldn't a title "Gypsy inside the sepia" be sufficent? Wouldnt that be an apt description. What does the rest add?
"Woman by the gold" is that meant to define "Gypsy"; golden Gypsy or is this a separate thought?
Crackles of wet grass and dew" What does that refer to?
The title seems to be "Gypsy inside the sepia" and the total poem is then reduced to
Black lace without a truth!! That would be succinct. Wouldn't it also be powerfully sufficient?
Are you really disciplined in the editing of the picture and poem? I ask myself, "What's the least change to the original that works" and then for verse, "What are the minimum words that need to express cascades of thoughts I envisage.
To me, "Gypsy inside the sepia" is plenty well defined! It's also so nicely unspecified in particulars to allow all the associated feelings you might want to incur.
Asher