Toolshed Woman

[Johan Combrink]

Yeah even the toolshed can look great like this. Some comments on this one would be greatly appreciated.

 

[Mark Doodeman]

Different, but I like it! Good lighting, and you did a good job of keeping the busy background subtle.

 

[Doug Kerr]

Hi, Johan,

I agree completely with Mark. The lighting and resulting tonal scale seem just right. The background is treated very nicely. And of course this is a way cute model, and a nice pose.

 

[Clayton Lofgren]

I like the background treatment, and the midsection is alluring, but the face and collarbones seem a bit too hard. I think I would like it better if the face was softer.

 

[Asher Kelman]

For a start, the simple reduction of the usual extra large logo has improved the presentation. This could be even smaller and I hope others will follow suit. Glad to see this!

I like the background treatment, and the midsection is alluring, but the face and collarbones seem a bit too hard. I think I would like it better if the face was softer.

Clayton has nailed part of the issue. Makeup on the face is fine when the girl is dressed. Otherwise, the entire body has to be matched or else she seems masked and freakish. Here the use of hard eye liner is brutal to her face. If however, one wants a hard look, then the entire figure should be treated the same way. So makeup to her face has to be very disciplined. Matching her face to her abdomen is another way to go. Frank Doorhoff believes the first person to pay after equipment rental is the makeup artist. It's the hardest to correct after the fact.

Still, I like the waif-like figure. Just need continuity of a palette of color on her skin.

Asher

 

[Johan Combrink]

Thank you for the great feedback folks.

This was all natural lighting. There was light reflecting of off a white wall towards her, and the light above her head was block as well.

Asher, I will make the logo even smaller, thanks.

Regards

johan

 

[nicolas claris]

Yeah even the toolshed can look great like this. Some comments on this one would be greatly appreciated.

Hi Johan
Agreed with the good lighing and the face needing a bit of softness…
I would have cloned out the piece of wooden box on the left of her hips and the painting roll on top of her head…

Thanks for sharing

Happy new year down below!

 

[Frank Doorhof]

Love the DOF and the look.
What I would have done is choosen a slightly different position to take away the door? on the left side of the picture.

 

[nicolas claris]

What I would have done is choosen a slightly different position to take away the door? on the left side of the picture.

or at least make it vertical in PS… like this maybe?

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[Johan Combrink]

Thanks for the constructive crit folks, again it is much appreciated. I am working on a few others and will post soon to see it I can at least get some others looking a little better.

Thanks Nicolas & Frank.

 

[Asher Kelman]

or at least make it vertical in PS… like this maybe?

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Very effective and sexy!

Good job. The angle of the pole make a great effect with the girl now. Also like the smaller logo.

Asher