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[Giorgio Wild]

This is the right Forum for my first Image on OPF, hopefully.

Critique desired. Tell me what you think.

Thank you for watching

Giorgio

 

[Asher Kelman]

Hi Giorgio,

Thanks so much for sharing such a delightful image. Is it right in this section? Let's consider that and get feedback. Do you have a title?

Asher

 

[nicolas claris]

Hi Giorgio
welcome onboard!

In this image I like the light and shadow coming from an invisible window on the right.
The effect would be enhanced if the rest of her body had less light… imho

 

[Giorgio Wild]

Hi Giorgio,

Thanks so much for sharing such a delightful image. Is it right in this section? Let's consider that and get feedback. Do you have a title?

Asher

Thank you. Unfortunally, I've No Title.

Hi Giorgio
welcome onboard!

In this image I like the light and shadow coming from an invisible window on the right.
The effect would be enhanced if the rest of her body had less light… imho

My Idea was to put some more light on her body to let the "Window" look a little more subtile. Do you think this wasn't a good idea?

Regards
Giorgio

 

[Bart_van_der_Wolf]

My Idea was to put some more light on her body to let the "Window" look a little more subtile. Do you think this wasn't a good idea?

Hi Giorgio,

I like that aspect, and I generally like subtle things (they can prove to be stronger than the obvious ones). The only aspect that troubles me is the light on her right eye. It makes her right eye look larger than her left one, and eyes are important.

Bart

 

[Doug Kerr]

Hi Giorgio,

This is the right Forum for my first Image on OPF, hopefully.

Critique desired. Tell me what you think.

Very nice, and a way cute model.

I find the shadow pattern over her right breast a bit bothersome, with the acute angular joint to it. I know it comes from the corner of the window, but it seems to take on a life of its own, in which it just seems a bit peculiar .

But I shall study that area further.

Thanks.

 

[charlie chipman]

Hi Giorgio
welcome onboard!

In this image I like the light and shadow coming from an invisible window on the right.
The effect would be enhanced if the rest of her body had less light… imho

That was my initial reaction as well. The window pattern catches my attention first and foremost followed by the accent light coming from
camera left. The fill has to much power and makes her the subject of interest with some light splashed
On her from either side. Reduce or remove the fill and the light splashed on her from the sides becomes
Prominent. I believe it would have a stronger impact.

 

[Giorgio Wild]

Thank you for the valuable critique. It gives me good Ideas for the next Images utilizing the "Window".

@ Doug: The light pattern on her Breast is about 52% coincidence It will be hard to get such a nice geometric form again, with light only.

@ Charlie: Meanwhile I'm believeing too, it may be better to move the Light (a Striplight) on camera left somewhat behind the Model. Use it more as a rimlight instead as Fill an add a bouncer for a much lesser fill on this side.

@ All: Again, thank you for the usefull kind of critique!

Giorgio

 

[Leonardo Boher]

I like that shadow, but I find it a bit hard in her arm. That shadow is really creative

 

[Abhijit Biswas]

Hi Giorgio,

I am writing this before reading the other critiques.

The model is cute but that's not what you want to know. The use of window light is good. It seems you have used some other light source to lit the right side of the model. As a result you lost the point of interest in this image. My eyes are runing everywhere and cannot find a single point of interest to hold my eyes on.

The skin tone looks alright to me. The highlights on her shirt on left shoulder looks sort of blown out. The lightlight on her right eye-white needs to be toned down to match the light graduation. You might also consider using a bit of light on the background to separate you model from the background especially behind her head.

You might also reduce the shadow intensity that is on the left side of her nose. That gives a weird feeling that her face is distorted. The pose is just fine.

Overall it's a nice effort to use natural light on a cute model. But try reshooting her with the above tips and I am sure we will see some great results from you in the coming days.

Abhijit Biswas
http://www.exposurebits.com

 

[Ashley Karyl]

It's a small point but you do have some degree of change in skin tone between the hands and other parts of the model's body which can be due to makeup, poor circulation or even just the hotspot on a studio flash, but it's worth spending a couple of minutes though just trying to smooth out the difference in Photoshop.

 

[Asher Kelman]

It's a small point but you do have some degree of change in skin tone between the hands and other parts of the model's body which can be due to makeup, poor circulation or even just the hotspot on a studio flash, but it's worth spending a couple of minutes though just trying to smooth out the difference in Photoshop.

Hi Ashley,

A good eye! Yes, the hands are subject to pooling of venous blood therefore the color will change after a pose of 3-5 minutes! Still, the hands can get more sun from driving and the best skin is beneath the undergarments.

So often we have a face damaged by natural tragedies of youth: acne wind and sun,Protected torso, baby soft breasts and roughed hands.

So in this example, how would one make the hands match the torso? I presume that's what you'd choose.

Asher

 

[Ashley Karyl]

It's perfectly natural to have slight variations in skin tone, however, in this case you have a shift in tone from warm golden tones in the upper arm area just below the shirt through to rather pink magenta on the fingers. I agree that you should try to make the hands match the torso, but personally I'd also try warming up the entire skin area just a little. You can always use a soft brush and the history tool or a mask to alter certain areas independently if required. Just give it a tweak and I think you'll find the image improves.

As a second thought, you could also lighten the face a little and selectively add some shine to the hair. The face is the natural first point of reference, so brightening it here to at least match the luminance of the other areas will give it the attention it deserves.