First what is this?
Antonio shows a B&W picture that is essential an out of camera representation of part of perhaps a larger man made structure he found interesting.
This shows of two metal surfaces on a flat plane, separated by a dark black gap or ibdentation where there appears to be no metal at all. Each of the two co planar surfaces show linear arrangements of rivets, almost flat to the surface. Over this single plane, there are taught ccables/ropes in two sets arranged in an X pattern. There are two holes from which cable can pass. One is empty and is a strong feature, while the other is empty and far weaker as an attention getter.
Antonio's Correia: Untitled
Well then, James,
In the original, the knot of cable/rope intersection feature is the most significant and attention-getting part of the image. What's more, in our culture, knots, crossings and intersections have a myriad of extraordinarily important analogs in every part of our lives. This is where things happen, people meet, agreements are made and wars break out!
So let's get back to structure once more. In your version, the weaker round hole, now on the top, fails to adequately anchor the image and the strong hole below draws attention to the now descending black line which ends up without a power function.
In the original, from the reference position of the powerful opening with cable, we traverse, left to right, descending, to meet with the lines rising boldly from the lower left. Everything meets at this one common knot/intersection of mass and complexity, the most significant feature of the entire composition. We have no fear leaving the frame as the staccato array of dots keep eyes exploring from all approaches to this main feature.
So, on my reading, Antonio naturally arranged a strong compelling composition from the outset.
However, I will revisit your version and see if it speaks more!