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Walk on the beach

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Cedric MASSOULIER

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A classical shot, made at Le Havre beach with my Leica M6...



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Asher Kelman

Asher Kelman

OPF Owner/Editor-in-Chief
Cedric MASSOULIER said:
A classical shot, made at Le Havre beach with my Leica M6...



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Hi Cedric,

I like the contemplative mode of the picture. The construction, with two major regions, pulls us even further from the lone figure in the distance. The vertical canvas adds to the tension. So, set the way it is with an indefinite tiny figure, vertical format and two zone structure with weak leading lines, it has a special unique character.


However, I had reservations about some choices. One is dealt with already! First the proximal rock at the base of the picture was not originally not totally seen, (perhaps an incomplete loading) and either shouldn't be there or should be complete. I'm glad to see it fully now!

Next, I'd look at the entire composition. to me, this would be an horizontal composition. It's natural that way and that is more restful, going in with the contemplative idea, if that indeed is a valid attribute. The next thing I would give attention to is the lines in the sand which I'd prefer to see defined.

I hope you will continue this walk on the beach and bring us more of this motif.

Asher
 
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Cedric MASSOULIER

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Hi Asher,

I understand your opinion : i wondered if i should add more contrast on theses lines on the sand... I will propose a second version soon.

Regards,

Cedric.
 
Asher Kelman

Asher Kelman

OPF Owner/Editor-in-Chief
Hi Cedric,

Can I trouble you to place side by side the original and the new but reduced each to 60% of size so we can have white space around them. Ideally I'd like each as a print on my wall to view them with justice!

If you post them smaller, we can see them side by side and get the entire gestalt of each composition and the differences. It might well be that the first is indeed more effective.

Thanks for your patience with my obsessions about your fine picture!

Asher
 
Asher Kelman

Asher Kelman

OPF Owner/Editor-in-Chief
Yes,

As I suspected, the first one is indeed stronger because of the indefiniteness needed that you chose originally! Thanks for helping us see this. This is not an easy picture to totally evaluate here!

Asher
 
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